Comments:

Jacara!
Your arguments are super clear and i think you have a very spot on sense of direction, sounds like you know exactly what you wanna include in you paper. However i am in the same boat as Ian and am confused by your thesis. Who is making theses expectations and what do they mean by better? Do you feel out dependence on digitalization is becoming better? From the sound of your arguments which is what i think you should base your paper on, things seem to be getting worse. My suggestion is that you switch up your thesis a little to make it flow with your arguments. Your four arguments seem to sum up the major areas of discussion talked about in class. Your evidence seems to be coming from many different sources.

Looking forward to reading the rest of your paper!


Ian,
Your thesis really drew me in and the connection you made was not an obvious one but that was very original, you compared our dependence on digitalization to cattle being hereded. Almost as if we are trapped and have no choice or say in our ability to be free. Your arguments are very strong and use very unique ideas ones that we did not discuss so much in class! good work! can't wait to read the rest!